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Freedom!

Started by Diablo637, June 20, 2008, 06:37:00 AM

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How well written is this poem? (1-10)

horrible (1-2)
poor (3-4)
fair (5-6)
good (7-8)
excellent (9-10)

Diablo637

Thousands choose to fight

They fight for your every right.

Life as we know would cease to exist,

If not for their courageous souls.



You run the mile,

Cursing those who make you

He runs a mile

Dodging bullets and bombs

Knowing he might not make it

All he has to say is,

?Tell my wife and children,

I love them.?



You go home to lie in bed

Dreaming of your wants and wishes

While he retreats from war

With your freedom in sight.


This is yet another poem I wrote for school.
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Diablo637

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Hunterguy8

I loved it! excellent.

Aveyond06

I do not like the ryming scheme - you could have simply put none. Same for the rythme.

Yet the content is of course wonderful - common, but wonderful. :D

Con1887

I voted excellent because it's excellent.

Your very good at making poems I like it. :)