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Off Topic => Art => Songs, poems, etc. => Topic started by: Thrive on June 06, 2009, 12:38:08 PM

Title: Love and Pain
Post by: Thrive on June 06, 2009, 12:38:08 PM
Love And Pain
Under you I look toward the bright stars.
As they make your face glow with luminance.
We sit together watching them afar.
Making ourselves a tiny audience.
Though I see it in your eyes that you seem
Not as happy as you are normally.
Pain and Sorrow create horrific screams
That are masked by love naturally.
There is no cure to such pain and sorrow.
Love may subdue its effects of misery.
Those who are unloved are forced to burrow
Themselves ‘til someone comes and makes them cheery.
   But with you next to me, misery fades
   And you become my only cure that aids.
Title: Re: Love and Pain
Post by: Barrage Pked on June 06, 2009, 02:40:42 PM
You write very well. Nicely done.
Title: Re: Love and Pain
Post by: serguy3 on June 06, 2009, 05:24:15 PM
DANG.... Nice.... Lol. xD.... Hey barrage! That's basically like mine, not rhyming? You aren't saying "IT NEEDS TO RHYME, IT'S NOT A POEM." To him? =P

       ~Serguys_Pure.
Title: Re: Love and Pain
Post by: Thrive on June 06, 2009, 10:15:12 PM
rofl
Title: Re: Love and Pain
Post by: Zack on June 06, 2009, 10:18:29 PM
Quote from: Jeremy
Short posts in which contain "lol" "ya" etc.. this will not be tolerated by anyone
Read the rules man, I don't want to see you get banned  :(

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Title: Re: Love and Pain
Post by: Barrage Pked on June 11, 2009, 05:59:27 PM
Quote from: serguy3 on June 06, 2009, 05:24:15 PM
DANG.... Nice.... Lol. xD.... Hey barrage! That's basically like mine, not rhyming? You aren't saying "IT NEEDS TO RHYME, IT'S NOT A POEM." To him? =P

       ~Serguys_Pure.

Most of it rhymes...