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Off Topic => Art => Songs, poems, etc. => Topic started by: Diablo637 on June 20, 2008, 06:37:00 AM

Poll
Question: How well written is this poem? (1-10)
Option 1: horrible (1-2)
Option 2: poor (3-4)
Option 3: fair (5-6)
Option 4: good (7-8)
Option 5: excellent (9-10)
Title: Freedom!
Post by: Diablo637 on June 20, 2008, 06:37:00 AM
Thousands choose to fight

They fight for your every right.

Life as we know would cease to exist,

If not for their courageous souls.



You run the mile,

Cursing those who make you

He runs a mile

Dodging bullets and bombs

Knowing he might not make it

All he has to say is,

?Tell my wife and children,

I love them.?



You go home to lie in bed

Dreaming of your wants and wishes

While he retreats from war

With your freedom in sight.


This is yet another poem I wrote for school.
Title: Re: Freedom!
Post by: Diablo637 on June 20, 2008, 06:37:50 AM
: I need a moderator to lock this topic...please. "
Title: Re: Freedom!
Post by: Hunterguy8 on July 07, 2008, 12:57:50 PM
I loved it! excellent.
Title: Re: Freedom!
Post by: Aveyond06 on July 12, 2008, 06:29:33 AM
I do not like the ryming scheme - you could have simply put none. Same for the rythme.

Yet the content is of course wonderful - common, but wonderful. :D
Title: Re: Freedom!
Post by: Con1887 on July 14, 2008, 05:51:00 PM
I voted excellent because it's excellent.

Your very good at making poems I like it. :)