Divinity,
Our relationship was simplicity,
Annihiliation,
We've effectively turned it into an abberation.
Cold October afternoons,
Devoted to no one but you,
Disrepair,
It seems I'm having an affair with despair.
Fuckk it,
Let's roll,
This is how the story goes.
September,
One of the best times I can remember,
Best of friends,
But sadly, that was destined to end.
You've left a void,
A wish,
A dream,
Now I can't seem to find its seam.
Boundless rage,
It washes over this page,
Honey, you're not a f*cking martyr,
You need to try harder.
I can envision what used to be,
Sadly its presence is no longer comforting,
I finally figured out what you want from me,
Too bad it's never gonna be,
You need a hit from your own personal heroin,
Sorry honey, but your dealer ditched you,
And I obviously cannot fix you.
I wish for our rift to mend,
I wish for your despair to end,
But life sucks,
And you'll be hard-pressed to find anyone else who gives a fuckk.
I love you,
Nothing will change that,
I care,
I wish you'd let me be there.
Fuckk it all,
I'm gonna be strong,
Even if it means I'm in the wrong,
Tana,
Fuckk it all,
This whole situation is just wrong.
This was made without any edits or prior planning. It wasn't made to my usual standards, it wasn't made to entertain anyone, it was made to save myself from doing something rash.
... is this what you where referring to when you said that you wher gonna write a new poem?.... this one is bad... not bad writing bad either...
Quote from: Prehistoric on February 23, 2010, 05:50:54 PM
... is this what you where referring to when you said that you wher gonna write a new poem?.... this one is bad... not bad writing bad either...
What? <_<
Heh, i doughnut'd up ROFL... i meant simply that the poems meaning is bad... writing is good though! ...Good work... again...
Ahh, I see. Thanks for the feedback. Most of my good work comes from agony. Keep in mind that I made this one with no prior planning or edits.
Nice Poem, i love it but there is language..
Anyway who cares lol, Have fun writing more. :P
Awwwww, Travis is in <3!! I feel for ya though, the girl I like is like my friend but yeah... =}. did you ever put the poems under her windshield??
Nah, we hung out today and I 'had to go to the bathroom'. So I went outside and put them on the driver's side seat in her car. When we went to the basketball game, she saw them and like almost cried. :O All-in-all, today was a pretty good day.
Doughnut im freaking glad! YOu deserve good days!
Quote from: Prehistoric on February 25, 2010, 12:42:42 AM
Doughnut im freaking glad! YOu deserve good days!
Haha, very appreciated. xD
Nice, Ilike that you did it while she was there too, that took some big balls. She'll like that! =D
Quote from: imnotme on February 25, 2010, 11:24:23 PM
Nice, Ilike that you did it while she was there too, that took some big balls. She'll like that! =D
Haha, thanks. I decided I don't want to be in a relationship with her anymore, there was more less drama when we were just best friends. So that's the way it's gonna be. :P We hung out again today, at her school's last basketball game.
-claps- sorry i wasn't the first to post..even though i was the first to see it..psh..>.>
make some more!
Quote from: mooshu on March 01, 2010, 05:53:42 AM
-claps- sorry i wasn't the first to post..even though i was the first to see it..psh..>.>
make some more!
Jose, I don't want to make any more lol. For me to make a poem, I need either a lot of anguish or a lot of happiness. And I'm too pessimistic for the latter. xD
well, make one for me. <3 about me. <3 plox. <3
Quote from: Program on June 21, 2010, 03:30:32 AM
Epic poem; nice job Travis.
This is a nice poem, i totally agree with you!
Nice Poem or song. ;D